I’m trying but you still cannot see,
I’m trying to be the best I can be,
I’m trying but my voice remains unheard,
I am instead muted such as that of a hunted herd.
I am not aimless with my illustrations,
Albeit that this creativity is fuelled by frustrations,
Irony becomes apparent in the finality,
Creation out of frustration, but frustration is the ending reality,
As words go unread,
Voice has nothing said,
And my physicality is dead,
Dead as my other attributes as one continues to fruitlessly strive,
Morale-bruising blackened like the skin of a banana fruit as I sit in strife.
I’m trying! but that which others see as my successes, I see as failures,
Trying to emancipate myself from mental slavery like the wailers,
I scream in the face of success!
All but crying in attempt to progress my quest,
BUT..
Success turns its’ back on me,
However I continue to coarsen my throat in plea.
I’ve tried but you did not see,
I tried but there is no best part of me,
I tried but my voice will never be heard,
I’ve tried but I have to succumb to the fact that my attainment is absurd!
The imagery in this poem is amazing. i can feel your struggle- the only thing i would have maybe done differently is be a bit more positive and fore see a raise to victory, because there is always a light at the end of the tunnel. Alot of alliteration which works well also.
ReplyDeleteI FULLY UNDERSTAND YOUR SENTIMENT. BUT THE NEGATIVE ENDING AND FEELING OBSERVABLE IS JUST THE REALISM OF THE SITUATION. I LIKE FOR MY POETRY TO BE REAL AND REPRESENT THE REALITY OF WHICHEVER SITUATION IS BEING PORTRAYED, THUS WHEN THE SITUATION CHANGES THEN MAYBE ILL RE-EDIT OR MAKE A PART 2. THANK U DEARLY FOR YOUR COMMENTS. I REALLY APPRECIATE IT.
ReplyDeleteReflecting on the emotion emitted from the poem, the poet or person in question, is caught in a state of transition. Has give their all to sociaty an still has more to give but is stifled by the restrictions life brings. It is portrayed from the eyez of the Poet or person that they have given 100% an still not being heard, only muted like the hunted who were heard..
ReplyDeleteThat's probably why there is no positive outcome, no light at the end of the tunnel.. Becoz the light has not yet come...
WHO ARE YOU ANONYMOUS?? YOUR COMMENTS ARE VERY MUCH ON POINT.
ReplyDeleteIts me the 1 an only “Shorty"... Seekin the truth amoungst the lies... The realist from the fake... That has anonymously commented...as I said, I like poetry...!
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